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Not enough students choose science subjects in universities in many countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects to the society?

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An insufficient number of students opting for
subjects
 like STEM (
science
 , technology, engineering and math) has led to forcing
countries
 like the US, Uk, and Canada to promote these
subjects
. As most of the students opt for
subjects
 like arts, culture and music .
This
 is setting the wrong trend in these
countries
 as Corporations are forced to outsource high-paying jobs to
countries
 like India And China. In the impending ,essay I will discuss reasons and their effect on society.
To begin
 with , In developed
countries
subjects
 like Maths,
Science
 and Technology are not given priority by the school education system . ,
Moreover
 parents
also
 do not encourage children to study and put more effort to excel in these
subjects
. Most children do not get proper guidance from teachers to study these
subjects
. In India,to cite an example , a major focus of studies revolves around maths and
science
 from primary to senior secondary level.
Furthermore
 , Declining interest in stem
subjects
 leads to a Negative impact on employment generation. As there are not sufficient numbers of engineers and scientists available to be hired by Corporations. In the US, during the 2008 recession , the Obama administration realised these loopholes in the American education system and enacted a stem workforce bill to promote
science
 and technology courses In US Universities.
To conclude
, Most youngsters in developed
countries
 should be encouraged to study
science
 and maths. If serious steps are not taken by these
countries
 there will be a negative impact on scientific research and development globally.
Whereas
 Corporations will force to outsource jobs in India and China.
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