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some people think that secondery school children should study international news as one of the school subject. give reasons for your answer and includ any relevent example from your own knowledge

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In my opinion, Studying international news and having knowledge regarding international relations has undeniably become very important these days. It is going to benefit sooner or later in life. In
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 in their life. International news gives us access to what the world is going to be like in the next few years and especially all the countries are essentially interlinked by one means or another. For ,example dollar going up or down has an impact on the entire world and not just America. So is the case with petrol and gold.
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 one needs to be in the loop from a very young age because it really helps in taking decisions
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 as where to settle eventually or where to work. Which country and resource is going to be the most beneficial for them in the long run so they can make independent decisions
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 Having knowledge is like owning an asset. In conclusion, the younger the kid is the more benefit
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 programme is going to give them in future at any point in life so it is absolutely essential for them to study international news.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global awareness, fostering, interconnectedness, critical thinking, analyzing, bias, complexities, proficiency, debates, articulate, empathy, cultural sensitivity, diverse cultures, global citizenship, globalized world, interconnected, economic, political, social landscape, informed, responsible, global issues
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