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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#qualities #skills #person #today’s #world #university #institutions
AI is an arguable phenome, which is developed by
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human. Today we have thoughts and
argues
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 about
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 benefits or
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 we get with it? Can the AI
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be sentient
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 screens have
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functions, which predict our wishes and requests.
The mankind
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 does
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 technical progress faster, smarter and
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 each year. AI helps
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as in professional work,
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 duties and is
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 tool for living in
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 time.
Also
, it helps to develop medicine, construction, transport and etc.
On the other hand
, we have some risks because of the fast
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 of AI. We can’t be sure that it to get out of control. Not included,
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 artificial superintelligence would be able to create its own race and be
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 creature
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first place in
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 and eliminate
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mankind.
To sum up
, these thoughts haven’t a certain conclusion, people can talk or argue about it until the future will come.
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