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Band 3.5

Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraging as it is good for both employers and workers. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Employers and employees have a complicated relationship, with one always having greater advantages than the other.
However
, with the ease of remote working, the dynamic became more equal. Being able to work from home allows employees to save the cost and
time
 of commute, and
time
 spent getting ready for work,
as well as
 have a better work-life balance. It allows them to spend more
time
 with their families, take breaks
according to
 their comfort, and be more productive as employees.
This
 in turn helps employers in terms of employee efficiency,
as well as
 satisfaction. As a student, I did almost two years of remote classes, and those were some of my highest-graded courses because I was able to exert more autonomy over how I managed my schedule and how that affected the rest of my life. I was able to schedule a
time
 to work, study, relax, and have fun.
This
 allowed
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better mental and physical health as well, which in turn, increased my productivity.
Therefore
, working from home has proven to be a good experience for both parties
,
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 and should be encouraged.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telecommuting
  • Remote work
  • Flexibility
  • Productivity
  • Collaboration tools
  • Cybersecurity
  • Work-life balance
  • Carbon footprint
  • Virtual meetings
  • Autonomy
  • Digital nomad
  • Telework infrastructure
  • Ergonomic workspace
  • Connectivity issues
  • Time management
  • Self-discipline
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