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As computers are being used more and more in education, teachers will soon be unnecessary To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Increasingly the use of technology in education will make teachers not
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.I totally disagree with the fact that the frequent usage of technology in education will make tutors not to be useful.
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 in the subsequent paragraphs. In our modern world, technology has become part of our daily activities in life in
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we cannot ignore the impact it brings us and how it makes things to be done easier.
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, it cannot replace the work of tutors.The work of tutors can never be underrated because they make sure every student understands the subject being taught without leaving anyone behind
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 motivates them which a computer cannot do.
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, not everything read online by a learner can be understood and the computer cannot explain.
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, a survey conducted in KNUST showed that 90 per cent of students opted for physical teaching
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 online because they benefited much from it compared to the other.
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, there can be instances where the computer can break down or there might be internet disconnections which can interrupt learning.
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, personnel cannot break down but can teach anytime without inconvenience.
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, an online lesson being taught can disconnect
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 internet disruption but trainers cannot break because they are not being controlled by anything.The role of teachers to students cannot be overemphasised
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 the benefits it brings to them In conclusion, trainers make every student
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 every subject being delivered and
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, they cannot go off because they are not being controlled by anything.For all these reasons, teachers will be necessary anytime
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly present your main points and summarise your argument.
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You have provided some relevant examples, but make sure to link them more explicitly to your main points and argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-learning
  • Digital curriculum
  • Online resources
  • Personalized learning
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Critical thinking
  • Motivational strategies
  • Ethical guidance
  • Remote learning
  • Blended learning
  • Hybrid educational models
  • Instructor-led training
  • Human-computer interaction
  • Technological pedagogy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Cognitive development
  • 21st-century skills
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