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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year .  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year .  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .
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The diagrams provide information about the changes
of
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 the airport that will be made next year;
as well as
, the site at the moment.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the area will have more space in the future;
moreover
, a large number of facilities will be constructed; not only that but it will
also
 become more high-tech. A closer look at the first map reveals the look of the zone right now. There are only a few things
such
 as a check-in point,
walkway
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 which has only 8 gates, and a cafe to name but a few;
furthermore
, there are only 1 exit and 1 entrance. The second plan shows the developments of the section a year later. A lot of new facilities will be installed,
for instance
, a place for dropping bags, a store, an ATM,
a
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and a
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hiring car service;
in addition
, they will
also
 rise the number of coffee shops and adjust the old
one
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ones
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 and check-in to
new
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a new
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 location;
as well as
, the increase of the departures and arrivals will
also
 be promoted; on top of that, they will increase the size of the above part and change the walkway into sky train with 18 gates in order to become more convenience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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