These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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massive number of countries, fewer and fewer individuals want to become
educators
. Primarily in middle
school
. In
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essay, I will explain the reasons for the problem and the cause of the solution. A huge amount of humankind doe
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want to get
teachers
. First of all, they avoid that get nervous. Because
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they teach
adults
who are indifferent to any subject.
Educators
lose their minds during teaching teens. Second of all, high schools request high-skilled experience from
teachers
.
As a result
, decrease some teaching skills.
In addition
, minors are down to earth. That's a reason why
teachers
do not want to waste their time on
adults
. Because
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they know that it does not worth doing special things. All in all, the public rather primarily
school
than secondary
school
. Because
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primarily
school
children did not know their personality traits.
However
,
adults
, some occasionally, know their human rights.
Additionally
,
teachers
become strict with some teenagers. It has become an argument.
On the other hand
, some problems have a solution. First of all,
teachers
must be experts in their jobs. Because
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they might know children's behaviours and
educators
could be psychologists for teenagers.
Secondly
, government create opportunity for any kind of technology.
For instance
,
adults
are interested in some lessons which have a computer. On top of that,
educators
might know that teens have an interest in their own profession.
Finally
,
teachers
can be creative
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. It is concluded that nowadays a lot of countries humans who want to become
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educators educators
, especially in higher education . In
this
essay, I give the cause of problems and
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