The government should ban smoking in all public places, even though this would restrict some other people's freedoms. Do you agree or disagree?
The commission must restrict smoking in public areas society. I strongly agree with the statement because the drawbacks of smoke caused by cigarette is more than the benefit.
On the one hand, some people believe that smoking can give relaxing emotions.
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, someone who works in the mechanical industry often smokes after work time to release their work pressure. Linking Words
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on the other hand
, smoking preferably in the open areas brings more disadvantages to society. Linking Words
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, it will be caused to the non-smokers who scent the haze and cause some health problems Linking Words
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as shortness of breath and cancer. If non-smokers are exposed to it consistently, Linking Words
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, it gives a chance of chronic disease and death. Linking Words
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, the haze will affect the environment, especially the air pollution. It is not only impacting society but Linking Words
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as animals and plants who live in the community. The government must create policies to mitigate Linking Words
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For example
, they may build a place only for smokers so they can smoke freely inside there, and they will not disturb others.
In conclusion, smoking may be beneficial for some people who use it for their needs. Linking Words
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Finally
, the commission has to be creative in making the policies so their citizens can live side by side.Linking Words
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