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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
#line #visits #uk #bar #countries #residents
The Line graph illustrates the frequency of
travels
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travel
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 in and out of the country by its citizens and foreigners over a 20-year period of time in
UK
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the UK
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whereas
, the bar chart gives data on the most famous travel destinations in 1999 by
UK
 nationals. During the 20-year period of time, higher number
people
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of people
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 travelled to other
counteries
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countries
 compared to the number of
foregin
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foreign
 people who visited the country itself. It shows the same trend throughout the given duration. From 1979 to about 1985 both lines show a slow increment but after that,
travels
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travelling
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 done by
UK
 people
accelarated
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accelerated
 rapidly. In 1999,
UK
 nationals visited France the most which
is
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are
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 about 11 million
while
 only around 2 million visited Turkey in that same year.
Number
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A number
The number
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 of
persons
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people
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 who travelled to
spain
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Spain
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are
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is
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 greater than that of
USA
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the USA
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 and Greece.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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