Write a letter to a friend about an item you borrowed last week, that accidentally got damaged. In your letter – Describe the item. – What was the damage? – What do you intend to do to rectify the problem?

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Dear Jenish, I hope you are doing well. I wanted to tell you about an item which I was taken from your home

last

week. I am sorry to tell you that

this

was damaged by my

cousin

accidentally.

Firstly

, as you are not available

last

week, I would like to describe an item which I borrowed from your house with your parent's permission. I took a

video

game

to my home because my cousins visited my house

last

Sunday. They want to play

video

games with me so I decided to purchase a new one. But at the time, I remember those past days, when we were playing the same

video

games, so I visited your house and borrowed it.

Secondly

, I would like to describe an incident where it was damaged by my

cousin

. We just played it in the morning and suddenly my

cousin

stands up to drink water and the remote of the

video

game

was fallen into the ground with the

video

game

unit.

Therefore

, there was a crack in the remote

as well as

that unit. Again, I would say it became

due to

accidentally. I have very sorry about that.

Lastly

, I will bring it with me when I go to my company and if it is reparable by the shop's person

then

I do it ,

otherwise

Add a comma

,otherwise

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I replace it with a new

video

game

and give it to you. Once again, I am sorry on behalf of my

cousin

. I hope you understand the situation. Hope to hear from you soon. Thank you for your time. See you soon. Warmest regards,

Milav

Correct your spelling

Milan

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

270 words

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