IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1.5

Thegraph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#thegraph #shops #country #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph illustrates information about the number of stores in
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 certain nation from 2011 to 2018, which is divided into new openings and closures.
Overall
, the trends of
two
Correct article usage
the two
show examples
 kinds of shops are downward , and the number of shop closures experienced more active fluctuation. Starting at nearly 9000 shops opening in 2011, the figure fell sharply to 4000 in 2011, before increasing gradually to over 6000 for the next 2 years.
However
, it showed a downward trend towards 3000 shops until 2018.
On the other hand
, the stores which closed in 2011 were only
two thirds
Add a hyphen
two-thirds
show examples
 of those opening, with over 6000.
After
this
,
this
 number remained stable for
Correct article usage
the
show examples
next 3 years, followed by a significant drop
took
Correct pronoun usage
that took
show examples
 place to reach the lowest point of under 1000 in 2015. Fortunately, there was a rapid growth to about 5000 and stayed constant until 2018.
Submitted by clairelee890201 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: