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Some people think that man and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The past few decades have witnessed the prevalence of taking more roles in society by
women
.
However
, there
is
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 ongoing debates on whether
men
 just have
ability
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the ability
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 to do some particular jobs and others are only by
women
. To the best of my knowledge, completed works do not depend on gender,
men
 or
women
 can take part in any
jobs
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job
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. In the modern world,
women
 go to school and get as high
education
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an education
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 as
men
. That means that all residents have knowledge, understanding and ability to be able to take responsible
the
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 job they want to do.
This
 is obvious when looking at
this
 example that more and more
women
 become
to
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apply
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pilots and firefighters which are
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the kind
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kind
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kinds
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 of occupation people suppose to be just for
men
. In school, boys are taught about gender and employment.
Therefore
, they will not get hesitate to choose
art work
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artwork
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 or fashion work when they grow up
such
 as fashionista, model,
painter
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or painter
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,… In conclusion, there is no job which is just only property for
men
 or
women
. Everyone can learn, practice, and develop themselves to
suitable
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be suitable
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 for no matter position they love to be
.
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in.
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