The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram depicts, how a town in Australia gets drinking
water
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from the collection of rainwater.
Overall
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, it is a four-stage process starting from the collection of rainwater in a drain to removing chemicals and sending it through pipes to a town.
Firstly
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, the rainwater is collected
in
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on
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the roofs which have an overflowing drain built from all the houses directly connecting to the
water
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filter.
Next,
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the
water
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has been filtered and directed to an external pipe to get to the storage area.
This
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pure
water
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has been stored in a huge storage tank underneath the ground.
Next,
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the storage
water
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is
coupled with
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another tank through a connected valve. Once the
water
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has been transferred, the
water
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treatment process begins. The process continues till the chemicals present in the
water
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are segregated to the top of the tank.
Following
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this
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,
water
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has been sent across the town through a pipe which connects every house and it is used for drinking purposes.
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