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The chart below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate how many international
languages
 British
students
 at a particular university in the United Kingdom which has the ability to communicate with native speakers between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
percentage
 of
students
 who are able to speak Spanish is the highest
rate
 between 2000 and 2010.
Moreover
, from 2000 to 2010, there has a similar the lowest
percentage
 of
students
 who can speak others language is German. Regarding 2000, the
percentage
 of
students
 who are able to speak Spanish is the highest
rate
 which is 30%.
Secondly
, there have
students
 who cannot speak other
languages
 about 20%,
while
 there has the same
rate
 in terms of
students
 who can speak French and another language at 15%.
Likewise
, the
percentage
 of
students
 who have the ability to communicate in German and two other
languages
 at a similar
rate
 is 10%. Turning to 2010, the
percentage
 of
students
 who are able to speak Spanish is the highest
rate
 which is 35% much more than the year 2000 by 5%. Meanwhile, there is the same
percentage
 which is 10% in terms of
students
' abilities to speak German and French and cannot speak other
languages
 without English.
Finally
, in other
languages
 , the second majority that
students
 speak in 2010 another language (20%).
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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