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The diagrams below show the floor plans for a trade conference in 2009 and the same conference in 2010

The diagrams below show the floor plans for a trade conference in 2009 and the same conference in 2010
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The maps illustrate changes that took place at the trade
conference
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 from 2009 to 2010.
Overall
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, the
conference
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 underwent a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which are the expansion and relocation of the
conference
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 hall and
exhibition
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area
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. The balcony in the east of the
conference
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 was added lounge
area
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 for consumers in 2010. There used to be a registration right next to the balcony, but it was
then
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 expensed and shifted to the refreshments
area
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, which is between the side and the main entrance. One of the most noticeable changes is that a
conference
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 hall was constructed in the southeast of the trade
conference
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, replacing the
exhibition
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area
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 there, came
along with
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 more seats provided. The
exhibition
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area
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 was moved to the left side of the
conference
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 which faced the main entrance. It is
also
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 important to note that the southward expansion of the
exhibition
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area
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 came
at
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 the disappearance of a meeting room and two empty rooms.
Subsequently
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, more display stands were added.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words conference, exhibition, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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