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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of individuals who
prefered
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preferred
 four different types of tourist contentment in Britain from 1999.
Overall
,
the
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a
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 significant part of visitors
had
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visited the Theme
parks
.
Moreover
,
people
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the people
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 who
visit
 museums and galleries was approximately similar to the first type.The lack of people decided to
visit
historis
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historic
 houses and monuments. The worst
place
 for visiting was wildlife
parks
 and zoos. In majority
segment
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of segment
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 in
chart
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 was in Theme
Parks
;
furthermore
,
this
 vacation was separated into small parts. Approximately 40 per cent of tourists
visit
this
place
as well as
 almost half of them
visit
 the Blackpool pleasure beach.
By contrast
, the other types of
this
 location were unpopular
such
 as
:
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 Alton Towers, Legolands,
Pleasulands
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and Pleasulands
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, since their results were under
the
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apply
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twenty
percentage
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percent
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. The second
famous
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most famous
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place
 for visitors
were
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was
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 museums and galleries because
it
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they
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 had
thirthy
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thirty
 seven per cent exactly.
Then
, somebodys' prefered the historical places
this
place
 stats
was
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were
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 15
percent
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per cent
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roughtly
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roughly
. The
last
 of the rating were wildlife
parks
 and zoos,
that
is
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apply
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kind
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kinds
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 of
place
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places
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 had only 12
percentage
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per cent
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parks, visit, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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