Some people believe that the difference between the lowest paid job and the highest should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some individuals believe that the gap between the
lowest paid
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profession and the highest ought to be decreased. In my opinion,
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argument is beneficial to
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people
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. Reduction of
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poverty and
income
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equality among employees can be provided with
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idea. There are lots of professions
earn
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that earn
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low wages a year,
besides
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a small group of others. It is true that these small
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of individuals are working hard and putting effort
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special areas,
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, professions with lower salaries are indeed deserving better financial status.
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among the
lower paid
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lower-paid
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jobs can be reduced
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decreasing the financial gap among professions. It can be provided with specialized taxes and fees.
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, in Turkey, the minimum wage is around 400 dollars,
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moreover
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this
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amount is not enough for providing daily requirements
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as nutrition and housing.
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,
people
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who have high
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income
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incomes
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should directly or indirectly share their extra money with others.
Income
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equality among
people
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, even genders are
highly
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important issue. Economic
inequality
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negatively affects
employees
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employees'
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motivation and performance.
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,
people
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should be aware of
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reality and take an action for reducing
inequality
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.In the UK, a doctor and a waitress
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both
serves
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their citizens in
a
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different way,
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nevertheless
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their earnings are
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different from each other. From my point of view, they have to be comfortable with their salaries
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for affordable
resourses
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resources
in daily life.
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, different jobs deserve equal salaries owing to serving
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the same
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society. In conclusion, many
people
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think that
income
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inequality
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between the lowest paying job and the highest should be decreased. Reduced poverty and diminished
income
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inequality
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can be provided with
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method. I
belive
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believe
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this
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can be a solution for the financial gap between jobs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wage gap
  • economic disparity
  • poverty reduction
  • motivation
  • social stability
  • company loyalty
  • pay structures
  • quality of life
  • equitable access
  • fairness
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