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Government are spending too much money on a space research while there are still lots of problems on earth to what extent you agree or disagree ??

#government #money #space #research #lots #earth
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Since time immemorial homo sapiens are always curious to find out what is in and beyond
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 and that jeal of learning kept us pushing beyond the boundaries continuously and so
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 are spending a major chunk on the same to fulfil
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 purpose.
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, there are people of the opposite view who believe that
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 shall hold
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 expenditure and
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 of exploring
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 money will be well spent only if it is used for resolving the existing
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 on
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. I am of the strong belief that even though
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research
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 is important for our kind but
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 on
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 should be tackled as a priority.
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, it is a fact that
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research
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 requires a huge budget and
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 always allocate a separate budget for
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, necessity, infrastructure, exigency, development etcetera. In recent years before private gamers like Elon Musk came into play it was always government institutions like NASA,ISRO etcetera, which used to get involved in
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 directly hitting the taxpayer.
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, it can not be overseen that
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 programmes have provided us with great technological advancement as
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 communication satellites we are enjoying free international calls in present days ,unlike the past decades when an international call was very expensive.
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, it is one of the benefits humans are enjoying
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,
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 our means of travelling have improved and are still getting better.
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, from the above ,
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discussion we have learned that
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 is an expensive chore and a good amount of taxpayers are used in
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 job.
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 is important here on
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 we have many other major
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 to look into like Poverty, Global Warming, Education, Environmental degradation etcetera. So the argument comes that
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 a huge amount we are wasting on
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research
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 should be used to eradicate the
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 our community is facing at present. As we all know curbing
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 menaces requires adequate funds and
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 has
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limited fund to spend so
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 of spending a huge budget on
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governments
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 must change the direction of
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 fund to face and cure the
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 on
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 to make it a sustainable place to live. To summarise, I can say that
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research
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 is crucial for us.
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, we have more important issues to deal with on
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 to make it and keep it a more beautiful and sustainable place to live.
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,
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 need to change the direction of the extensive funds spent in name of the
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research
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 to the benefit of the community here on
earth
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term survival
  • Scientific understanding
  • Technological advances
  • Earthly benefits
  • Pressing issues
  • Climate change
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • Balanced approach
  • Geopolitical stability
  • Space exploration
  • Space research
  • International cooperation
  • Priority
  • Immediate issues
  • Global challenges
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