Nowadays working from home using the internet has become increasingly common. What are the advantage and disadvantage of working online?

Nowadays, during the pandemic, a rising number of
companies
tend to
work
by
internet
at home replacing
work
in the office.
Thus
, the
internet
is a crucial key to
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the
work
style in
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modern society.
However
,
new
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method of working could cause some merits and drawbacks on
this
issue.
First,
the problems of
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are frequently a nightmare for commuters. The majority of people
who
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live far from their
companies
on account of high
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price
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in urban.
This
problem cause the commuters
have
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to get up early to dressing up myself and
taking
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long
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before they arrive
the
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office.
That is
a reason why working at home
such
convenient and
also
enhances
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efficiency by saving
the
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time
of
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commute.
Next,
Utilizing the
internet
without time and location
limit
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so that the colleges connect
each
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others
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other
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to comprehend the problems easily and quickly. It remarkably enhances the
efficient
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of working to create enormous benefits for
companies
.
However
, as
much
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we know the hierarchy is common existing in
companies
so when
employees
received messages or profiles of
company
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from their supervisors on the
internet
, the
employees
have to deal with the
situations
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situation
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immediately. It might affect
the
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personal time and increase the pressure
of
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staff
member
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.
In addition
,
companies
arranging group video conferencing could expose the privacies of
employees
when we
work
at home. In conclusion, Using the
internet
on
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work
is quite a
benefit
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vice
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and vice
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versa it might involve your life deeply to affect you much.
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the
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employers and
employees
should balance the type of
working
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to reach greater benefits.
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