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Band 2.5

Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that locally sourced.

Many
supermarkets
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 are selling more and more creations that are imported from other countries
instead
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 of selling food that
locally
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is locally
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 sourced. Many peoples sell
products
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 but
supermarkets
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 because there are very comfortable and easy
Especiually
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Especially
 humans like selling online
supermarkets
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 if they
wont
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want
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products
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has
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apply
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in
the
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apply
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supermarkets
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 . In
adittion
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addition
 peoples have
wont
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won't
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 fresh
products
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. One hand
supermarkets
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 are selling more
andmore
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and more
products
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 which there are best-selling and necessary.
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Moreover
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 some
supermarkets
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 are selling more
products
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 that
locally
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are locally
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 sourced
beacuse
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because
 there are possible and fresh
products
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. Domen people think geef method
benefical
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beneficial
 for end-user and comfortable .In
adittion
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addition
supermarkets
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 use that method and positive development .
On the other
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hand
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 some
supermarkets
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 think lots of
products
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 selling food lots countries sourced,
besides
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 that selling more
product
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products
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 ecumenical
supermaket
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supermarket
 because there are popular other countries ,but
also
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 some foods arrive there are foods spoilage from
long
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 road .
Thatʼs way
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That is why
 a lot of
supermarkets
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 are selling
locally
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local
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products
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. In my
conclusion
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 several
supermarkets
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 sell
locally
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local
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products
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 and
there
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their
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are
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fresh food
and
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apply
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in our life.
Furthermore
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 selling technology things.

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