The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.

The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
The given line chart illustrates the
number
of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
,
car
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remains the most favoured mean of commuting transportation in the UK. The figures for
car
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cars
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and
train
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trains
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increase significantly in the period
while
the opposite was true with
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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.
To begin
with
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1970, 5
million
UK citizens commuted by
car
, followed by the
number
of
bus
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and train users with 4
million
and 2
million
respectively. A considerable growth to 7
million
was witnessed in the
number
of
car
drivers
while
the figure for
train
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rose substantially to 3
million
in 2000.
By contrast
, there was a gradual decline to 3.5
million
in the
number
of
bus
commuters in 2000. Predictions express that the
number
of those who drive cars to commute will reach a peak at 9
million
in 2030. It is forecasted that the figure for rail passengers will climb by 2
million
while
that of
bus
users is expected to be less popular at 3
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, bus, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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