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The given chart illustrates the percentage of four different recycled materials between 1982 and 2010 in a country.

The given chart illustrates the percentage of four different recycled materials between 1982 and 2010 in a country.
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The graph demonstrates the proportion of four recycling
materials
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 being selected in a nation between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
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, the recycling
rate
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 of all
materials
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 experienced an increase, and
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aluminum
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 cans showed the biggest rise in 28 years.
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, the percentage of
paper
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 is the most recycled material of all throughout the survey. It clearly can be seen that glass and
paper
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 dominated the recycling
rate
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, beginning at 65% and 50% with the proportion of
paper
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 material and
of
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glass material, respectively. From 1982 to 1994, a fluctuating trend was witnessed by the
rate
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 of two
materials
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, yet in 1994, the percentage of recycled fragile material stayed unchanged at 50% and those of recycled
paper
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 material rose to 80%, compared to the year 1982. Throughout the
last
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 period,
although
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 the percentage of reused glass containers gradually went up by 10%, the
rate
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 of reused
paper
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 and cardboard witnessed a moderate decline to 70%. Regarding the reused
rate
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 of plastic and
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aluminum
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materials
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, people started to recycle
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aluminum
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 cans in 1986,
whereas
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 it was in 1990 for plastics, beginning at nearly 3% for the two
materials
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. In the next executive 24 years, the
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aluminum
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 cans’
rate
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 experienced a remarkable jump, increasing by an estimated 40% in 2010.
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, plastic was the
leastless
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 reused material of all, and the proportion of that witnessed a minimal upward trend, from 3% to under 10% between 20 years.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words materials, rate, aluminum, paper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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