Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

In modern
society
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many
people
are obliged to pursue a job that they hate or they are not capable to do. The economic system in many countries gives
less
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opportunities for
people
to find a
carreer
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career
that they enjoy. Citizens are often forced to pursue a
carreer
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career
path
that is
offered to them
in
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a precise moment especially
beacuse
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because
of economic necessity.
Furthermore
, workers are afraid to leave a stable job that they do not like because
this
could result in not finding another one.
This
results in
lack
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a lack
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of motivation among workers ,
consequently
in less productivity in spite of the
company
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profit. In
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,
people
are not satisfied with their existence, since working is one of the fundamental tasks that a human has during his life. Workers could
experience
psychological
disease
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such
as depression or anxiety. Affecting not only them but
also
their loved ones and their working environment. My
experience
has thought me the mental struggle that a person can
experience
doing something that you hate.
For instance
, during my high school
experience
,
i
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had to work as a teacher for many weeks. During that time my mental health drooped as
i
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was feeling like
i
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I
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was losing my time
in
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doing an activity that
i
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really did not
liked
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.
Unfortunately
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many
people
can’t choose
their
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them
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prefers
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type
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of
carreer
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career
because of disparities in the economic systems.
That is
why it is important to create more work opportunities
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  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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