Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, there seem to be a lot
less
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fewer
people
dedicating their free time to hobbies. This
essay will discuss about
both Remove the preposition
apply
positive
and negative impacts of lacking Correct article usage
the positive
passions
in several areas; it is argued that hobbies are being ignored Fix the agreement mistake
passion
due to
today's work factors especially happened between
adults.
Change preposition
among
Firstly
, the foremost reason why fewer people
pay attention to any forms
of relaxation is that daily stresses and strains of modern living style Fix the agreement mistake
form
has
been taking a toll on it, so leisure activities have become rare luxury items one cannot afford easily. What's more, technology Change the verb form
have
such
as Internet
is likely to serve as a constant distraction to make Add an article
the Internet
people
evade from developing their sense of creativity such
as handicrafts and painting. As a result
, youngsters these days suffer from mental health issues easier than the
past Change preposition
in the
according to
the
recent report in Times Magazine.
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a
Subsequently
, we cannot forget about how society plays a big part in connecting people
to one another through extracurricular activities, for instance
, morning walk
and playing squash. Fix the agreement mistake
walks
In other words
, we, human beings, develop a sense of intimacy based on our similar traits, likes and dislikes in order to establish stronger bonds than before. Therefore
, the less committed they are with
leisure pursuits, the bigger the drawbacks can be. An article described in New York Magazine is Change preposition
to
the
prime example highlighting the fact that Correct article usage
a
people
in developed countries become more distant with
each other Change preposition
from
instead
of growing invaluable habits together during free
time.
Correct pronoun usage
their free
To conclude
, it is a shame that people
can be clueless about the severity of hobbies which may even assist them with choosing the right career path as all successful people
are the ones who manage to shift what they love to do in their leisure time into permanent careers in life.Submitted by baranitunnaing.scorpio on
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