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These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is obvious that folks are moving to developed
countries
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 for a better future but everyone has different views on it, some think it will be beneficial for their children and others feel that shifting abroad is difficult for all to a fresh start. On the one hand,
life
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 is
an
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 going process
people
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 learn from their journey so, decisions of changing
countries
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 for better facilities is important in the field of education,
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 and industrial aspect.
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, it is
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life-changing
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 moment for
people
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 to give
better
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life
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 to their loved ones. In a recent survey, 90% of
people
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 immigrate to foreign
countries
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 to study and work. They want to achieve their goals and explore new things in their
life
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. On the other side, it is difficult for some
people
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 because they don't tolerate the difficulties
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they face in foreign
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 like the fresh start sometimes become more stressful because of struggle and competition. In fact, some are committed suicide because of depression. The main reason
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 it is hard to find a job and loneliness.
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 month
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 and one student who committed suicide because he was unable to handle the stress of work and studies . In conclusion,
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 it has some negative effects
to
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 moving abroad
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of opportunities in their own
countries
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 and
also
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struggle
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struggles
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 to become successful in foreign
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 ,
people
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 love to uplift their living standards by getting better opportunities in their
life
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