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These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is obvious that folks are moving to developed
countries
 for a better future but everyone has different views on it, some think it will be beneficial for their children and others feel that shifting abroad is difficult for all to a fresh start. On the one hand,
life
 is
an
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 going process
people
 learn from their journey so, decisions of changing
countries
 for better facilities is important in the field of education,
medical
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 and industrial aspect.
In other words
, it is
life-changing
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a life-changing
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 moment for
people
 to give
better
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a better
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life
 to their loved ones. In a recent survey, 90% of
people
 immigrate to foreign
countries
 to study and work. They want to achieve their goals and explore new things in their
life
. On the other side, it is difficult for some
people
 because they don't tolerate the difficulties
which
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they face in foreign
countries
 like the fresh start sometimes become more stressful because of struggle and competition. In fact, some are committed suicide because of depression. The main reason
of
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 it is hard to find a job and loneliness.
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, I read an article
last
 month
,
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 and one student who committed suicide because he was unable to handle the stress of work and studies . In conclusion,
although
 it has some negative effects
to
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of
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 moving abroad
due to
lack
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a lack
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 of opportunities in their own
countries
 and
also
struggle
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struggles
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 to become successful in foreign
countries
 ,
people
 love to uplift their living standards by getting better opportunities in their
life
.
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