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Advertising is nowadays often targets children or products like fast food and toys. Many people believe this is bad for children and their families. Do you agree or disagree, give reasons with examples.

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These days, tons of advertisements target
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 by displaying products like junk food and toys. Most people reckon
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 phenomenon is showing a bad impact on youngsters and their families. I partially agree with
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 argument, and I will explain why in
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 essay. First of all,
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 kind of advertisement leads
children
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 to ask their parents to buy the product, even if it is not a necessary item for them.
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, a lot of families with young
children
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 usually deal with financial crises after having a baby.
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,
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 situation contributes to inconvenience and misunderstanding in the family.
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, television channels usually promote foods or snacks, that are not suitable for
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's health.
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, fast foods and soft drinks are being advertised too often during the afternoon, which is the prime hour of
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's time spent on television.
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 usually roots problems of obesity and other physical issues.
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,
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 get bored with their games easily because of the advertisements, and they usually want more than they have. Even though, we can not give all blame to the marketing companies, who are just doing their job.
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, they can limit the number of advertisements relating to
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 kind of product. In conclusion, targeting
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 as a marketing tool is not an ethical move. Eventually, their parents are behind them, and
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 kind of advertising burdens them.
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, some of them are bad for the kids' physical and psychological well-being.
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