The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs show the changes in
ownership
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of electrical appliances in each household and how much time a country spent on housework per week from 1920 to 2019. In the past 100-year period, the property of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in families rose dramatically in the past 100-year period, reaching 100% in 1980 and remaining unchanged.
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the number of hours of housework each week saw a fall from 50 hours in 1920 to only about 10 hours a week in 2019.
Ownership
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of electrical appliances
such
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as washing
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machine
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machines
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had increased to 70% by 1960 before decreasing to just above 60% in 1980 and grew marginally compared to the other two domestic appliances in the next 40 years.
In contrast
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,
holding
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the holding
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of vacuum cleaners saw a steady upward trend. Families who owned a vacuum cleaner was only 30% in 1920, less than the washing
machine
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that 40% of households had,
however
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, it continued going up and overtaking that of the washing
machine
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in 1960, reaching 100%
ownership
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in 2000 and kept constant in the next 2 decades.
Overall
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, every household had a refrigerator and vacuum cleaner from 2000 in the particular country,
while
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ownership
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of washing
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machine
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machines
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fluctuated and rose slightly in the century.
On the other hand
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, there were corresponding drops in time people spent on housework.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership, machine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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