Some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
One of the social concerns today relates to
children
's education or parenting. While
it is widely believed that adults should follow their children
closely, others believe that children
should have more space to grow naturally. In my opinion, parents
need to give their children
the freedom to grow up while
supporting them when they are in need.
On the one hand, it is argued by some that parents
have to control and monitor their children
carefully. The main reason is that if their children
make a mistake or foul, they can find out the main point and educate their children
. It is also
possible to say that social situations now are pretty complicated; therefore
, they have to spend more time with their children
to teach them how to avoid dangerous situations. Another reason is parents
can force and encourage them to study. For example
, if the child doesn’t care about their score or their career, parents
will force them to learn and improve themselves.
On the other hand
, it is strongly believed by others that children
should have more space and area to grow naturally. People often have this
opinion because children
can learn by themselves, train and improve their soft skills, IQ and EQ when they have their own space and freedom. For example
, as reported by a study by Stanford University, children
who learn by themselves are always more active and flexible than other children
who are always supervised by the teachers at school or tutors / parents
at home.
In conclusion, either supervising children
closely or providing them with more area to feel more freedom and comfort has advantages. Personally, I tend to believe that we have to balance them, just make children
comfortable but still don’t let them spoiled.Submitted by yeshomeclass on
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