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Some scientists think that computers will soon become more intelligent than humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#scientists #computers #humans
It is often argued that
humen
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humans
 will be replaced by artificial intelligence in future by few scholars. I completely agree with
this
 opinion and think that reasoning and calculative abilities are enough for them to succeed to men. First of all, I believe that robots are on stage that they are capable to think and determine
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 and take decisions
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eskimo
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 robot developed by
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mitsubitchi
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Mitsubishi
 heavy industries is capable of observing human emotions and do day to day tasks. Other countries are
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 and
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developing
 their own varieties which in turn will increase
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 dependence on them and
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 lazy.
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, many modern vehicles and satellites
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 AI
capabities
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capabilities
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 of computers and there is always a chance of hijack.
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developement
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development
 of connected vehicles is being promoted by many manufacturers. People who love their jobs can easily excel in their fields of work and achieve better results than those, who put salary
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first place.
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, Henry Miller decided to leave his everyday job despite a good wage and ventured to become a writer. And after enduring years of ups and
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 he became one of the most famous and well-paid authors of the twentieth century.
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 of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low salary in
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 long-term perspective. In
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conclusion
, I strongly believe that job satisfaction is more beneficial than
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 salary because it makes people happy and motivated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • machine learning
  • emotional intelligence
  • technological singularity
  • ethical concerns
  • job displacement
  • autonomous systems
  • augmented reality
  • cognitive computing
  • data privacy
  • algorithmic bias
  • human-machine collaboration
  • technophobia
  • innovation
  • adaptive systems
  • robotic automation
  • ethical reasoning
  • computational limitations
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