The chart shows number of students who choose different subjects at university in 2005.

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The bar charts presented information about the figures of students that were interested in different subjects called science, mathematics, social sciences,

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, humanities, arts, literature, and law in the year 2005.

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, the bar charts compared information about men and women.

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, the arts mean subjects

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art, music and drama. The proportion of women who were interested in social sciences was the highest.

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, the lowest percentage was males who studied

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, men there were chosen science more than other subjects and the percentage was 23 per cent. Followed by mathematics was 18 per cent.

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were lowest was only two %

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, women which interested in mathematics are very lowest was four %. Followed by law and arts were five % and six % respectively.

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languages

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were 25 per cent and it was the highest.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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5 paragraphs

145 words

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The chart shows number of students who choose different subjects at university in 2005.

You work for an international company and you need some time off to attend a family celebration. Write a letter to the company’s manager. In your letter: give details of the celebration explain the reason why you need time off suggest a way to have your work done during that time.

There are fewer controls over the designs and construction of home and office buildings. So, people can build them however they like. Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages?

The linegrahp below shows the differences in the consumption of three fast food among Australian teenager. Write a report describing the information shown below.

Some prents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?