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The ability to maintain a friendship with small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer, do you agree or disagree?

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It is undoubtedly true that friendship plays an indispensable role in everyone’s life.
While
 one section of society believes that
keep
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 the friendship circle
is
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small is more beneficial than
to mingle
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 with new
friends
.
However
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 I do not agree with
this
 statement
due to
 numerous reasons. There are a plethora of facts that
needs
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 to be considered, and the preeminent one is adapting
new
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environmental
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 and people.
This
 is due
the
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 reason that people have to make new
friends
 when they have to leave their local environment. To illustrate, foreign countries are
alluring
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an alluring
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number
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 of international students for educational
Purpose
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.
Thus
 the new students have to be with the local people to know about their culture,
tradition
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and tradition
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.
Furthermore
, the cultural differences among the different nations have
fade
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 away
as a result
 of cultural diversity. Another key consideration is that making
mew
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new
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friends
 always gave an opportunity to know about cooperation and trust.
Therefore
 when two young individuals get in touch with each other, they get a chance to build up
a
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trust
upon
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in
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 each other.
Apart from
this
, in foreign
countries
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 young children help each other to prevent
the
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apply
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homesickness and depression. In conclusion,
i
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 would like to say that new
friends
 have their own positive outcomes that can not be ignored.
Submitted by Navneet Dhand on

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