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Nowadays, robots do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages.

#robots #jobs #humans #development
In recent years,
robots
 train to
work
similar
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 to
human
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humans
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 in some countries.
Although
robots
take
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 over human places in
company
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the company
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 is thought by some to be
a
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good for
region
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, other
people
 think that it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I think that
this
 transition can bring more
problems
 for folks compared to any
advantages
 it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of
robot's
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robots
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work
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instead
 of
people
 in
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the organization
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organization
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organizations
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.
Firstly
,
robots
 are useful because they can complete a task within the specified
timline
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timeline
, which is
very
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much needed
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 factor for any employer nowadays.
For Example
,
robots
 can be programmed in
such
way
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a way
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 that
it
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they
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 can
handled
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 multiple tasks at
the
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 time because of
high
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 core and speed of
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processor
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processors
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 being used in
it
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them
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.
As a result
,
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the company
a company
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company
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companies
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 can handle more
work
 parallel if they have more same kind of
robots
.
Secondly
, the
economy
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 growth of
nation
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a nation
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 is
increase
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due to
these development
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.
For example
, if more
robots
are
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work
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work
 fastly and safely in different fields which means our country's economy increase.
Nevertheless
, despite the
advantages
 above, I believe
community
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 could face serious
problems
 if
robots
are
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take over their jobs. One potentially dangerous problem is that
people
 lose their jobs.
In other words
, if
company
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a company
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 invests money
on
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 making
a
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robots
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robots
then
 it might be a serious problem for
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an employee
the employee
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employee
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employees
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 to
work
on
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 that
company
.
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Employer
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An employer
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 might relieve them from duty because their
work
 is not better than
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a robot
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robot
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robots
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. Another obvious issue is that
robots
 can cause serious hazards to someone or someone's property if they are not well programmed.
For example
, In
the
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 restaurant, if
robots
 are making
a food
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food
a portion of food
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 for
customer
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customers
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 and they are not aware
how
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of how
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 to handle a fire
then
 it may cause
problems
to
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 all customers and
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restaurant
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.
Furthermore
, we
also
 consider the
manufaturing
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manufacturing
 cost
are
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also
 higher compared to employee's salary. In conclusion, In today's world,
robots
 are taken a place of
people
's jobs
due to
there
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their
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advantages
. But I think
,
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 the
problems
 which we have seen above far
outweighs
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 any of the basic
advantages
 that it
have
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.
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