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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Solar
energy
 is becoming more and more popular as a source of household
energy
 in many countries around the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar
energy
?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Nowadays, people are using different types of
energy
 sources
due to
the
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technological advancement and the main one is
solar
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a solar
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energy
system
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systems
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.
While
 some people oppose
that
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using solar
energy
 is not an effective way of generating power. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 solar
system
 with particular examples. There are various
positives
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 effects
can
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that can
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 be seen when using
solar
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the solar
a solar
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system
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systems
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, and the prominent one is
safe
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a safe
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 environment and
clean
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a clean
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 ecosystem.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that the fuel
release
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 after burning the
woods
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, emits
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carbon dioxide
in
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 the atmosphere.
As a
result
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the
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global warming taking place because of ozone layer depletion. To illustrate,
According to
 the world health economist
the
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60 per cent of the harmful
radiations
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radiation
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were
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 caused by
the
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fuel consumption.
Apart from
this
,
sun
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the sun
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 is actually
the
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an
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 excellent source of
energy
.
Therefore
 no one has to spend too much money if they start using
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sunlight in order to generate the electricity for long term.
However
, there are some obvious drawbacks of introducing
solar
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a solar
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system
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systems
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 that can not be ignored at any cost.
Firstly
, the
set up
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set-up
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 of solar
system
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systems
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 requires high
cost
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costs
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 and high maintenance turnover.
The solar
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Solar
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 cells are so expensive that an ordinary person is not able to
afford
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themafford
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.
For example
, the cost is up to 10,000$ including the
set up
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set-up
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 and maintenance.
Secondly
,
the
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weather conditions can affect the effectiveness of
solar
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the solar
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system
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systems
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 as sunlight is obligatory to operate
this
system
.
Finally
, the house walls have to repair again after
the
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installing the solar
system
.
Hence
 it is again
expensive
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an expensive
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 method. In conclusion,
while
i
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 accept that there are
few
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 demerits of
this
 approach that must not be neglected, and must be addressed immediately, I still believe it is
an
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 constructive approach.
Submitted by Navneet Dhand on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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