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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world.whybis this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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Nowadays, solar
energy
 is booming in
energy
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 sector as a
source
 solution to
fulfill
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 household
energy
 needs around the world.
Therefore
, solar
energy
 has plenty of benefits and drawbacks, which
to
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are to
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 be discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, solar
energy
 is one of
energy
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the energy
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source
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sources
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 that become
a
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highly-used
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 now.
Besides
, solar
energy
 has
myriad
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of
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advantages for
living
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organism
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 in the world.
Firstly
, applying solar
panel
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panels
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 as
a
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an
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energy
source
in
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at
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home
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 scale will reduce
a
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carbon emissions and tackle climate change.
Secondly
, by using
solar
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a solar
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 panel, many countries become
an
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independent user and
not
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do not
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 depend on coal
energy
 anymore, which impact
in
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increasing green
environment
 community.
On the other hand
, solar
energy
also
 has disadvantages to our life.
For example
, when using solar
energy
, people need
an
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enough knowledge
how
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 to use it.
Moreover
, the technology and the materials are very expensive and
it
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require a
high cost
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maintanance
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maintenance
.
Eventhough
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Even though
, solar
energy
 belongs to green
energy
, the waste of
this
 technology is very harmful to the
environment
 and the way solar
energy
 works is depending on the
sun
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 availability
,
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 so
that
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it is not suitable enough for base load.
To sum up
, solar
energy
 is a good
source
 and solution for household
energy
, which
very
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 beneficial for reducing carbon emissions and tackling climate change. Despite
of
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it's
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 advantages, it
also
 has many drawbacks to our
environment
such
 as
high cost
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maintanance
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maintenance
, harmful
for
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 the
environment
 and very
intermitten
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intermittent
. But, solar
energy
 is the one of
solution
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solutions
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 for us for moving to
green
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the green
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energy
 community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable
  • Finite
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Initial setup costs
  • Electricity bills
  • Environmental concerns
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Climate change
  • Government incentives
  • Subsidies
  • Rebates
  • Technological advancements
  • Efficiency
  • Viable option
  • Installation costs
  • Dependency
  • Overcast weather
  • Backup energy sources
  • Toxic materials
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