We are surrounded by all kinds of advertising, which significantly influence our lives. Do the positive effects of advertising outweigh its negative effects?

It is acknowledged that we are living in a society
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is filled with
advertisements
, which shape our lives unconsciously. In my opinion, even though
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has some advantages,
but
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it still
bring
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brings
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about numerous harm than the benefits within itself. Admittedly,
advertisements
have a bunch of advantages for both customers and companies.
For example
,
due to
the big bucks brought about by placing
advertisements
, ordinary
people
can utilize search
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like Chrome and Firefox for free, which is a big deal, for making everyone entitled to acquire information.And at the same time,
such
practice makes big companies reap ongoing benefits.
Therefore
, it is a win-win game
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every one
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is benefiting a lot from
advertisements
.
However
, it doesn’t mean that disadvantages can’t be seen and neglected. In terms of choosing
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and purchasing mindset,
advertisements
definitely make
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negative impact on ordinary
people
’s lives.
For example
, the luxuries
advertisements
imply that just buying a hand-made bag can help you raise
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the rank , which leads to
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fact that more and more
people
who actually don’t make a big fortune put a huge amount of money
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Hermes, Chanel and Prada, await years to buy a luxury thing without other aims ,
such
practice can make them wind up jumping into a purchasing trap
instead
of thinking about what they truly want.
Overall
, it is
advertisements
that can make the economic boom
and
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strong in a way that’s inclusive. Negatively though, let
people
lose themselves by endorsing commodities that are not necessary.
Therefore
, as players in
such
a complex game which is filled with economic strategies, we cannot ensure
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who is the winner. But as ordinary
people
, one thing
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be ensured is that what and how
advertisements
change our lives mislead us to a worse purchasing approach
that is
taking money away from our purses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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