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some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to make people recycle more is to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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It is a fact that
excesive
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excessive
waste
production
 is a huge problem in every society because it makes enormous challenges in any environment so I, strongly support
government
 or local
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 intervention
of
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this
 problem through rules and regulations. In
this
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To begin
,
the
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government
 regulations and the prohibition of
waste
management
provides
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 enormous changes in
this
 society.
Firstly
, it will change the mindset of
people
 because they have a clear outline of
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the consequence
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consequence
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consequences
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 of violating
government
 intervention
of
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recycling
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 process.
Therefore
 ,it helps to generate public and civic sense against
waste
production
.
Secondly
,
the
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waste
management
laws
 always help manufacturers to follow proper security measures to recycle their excessive
production
.
For example
, in recent years Indian
government
 enacted an act related to river protection around industrial areas in which
this
 law clearly specified how to reduce water pollution through industrial
waste
.
In addition
, new studies show that 50% of water pollution
reduced
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 in India because of
this
 proposed law.
Thirdly
, the environmental protection
laws
 will mobilize a clear view among new generations so they can have
this
 knowledge throughout their life
Finally
,
people
 are different in their nature
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therefore
 some need strict
laws
otherwise
 they will deny
the
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social responsibilities.
On the other hand
,
people
 need not only these
laws
 but more educational awareness
for
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waste
management
.
Although
, strict law helps to reduce excessive
waste
production
but
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every individual needs the knowledge of considering their surroundings.
Furthermore
, the
government
 should impart and welcome machines, creative ideas and small-scale organizations to reproduce
waste
. To illustrate
this
, in Bangladesh the
government
 introduced financial aid for small-scale industries
those who
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 produce products from
trash
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the trash
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.
In addition
, it helps to reduce 47% of
waste
the
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problems in Bangladesh. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
laws
 will help to mobilize
positive
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a positive
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 mindset among
people
 for
waste
management
 and it
also
 helps to protect the mother of nature.
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