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Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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In recent years, more than more
students
 going overseas to study. In spite of that fact studying
in
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foreign bring benefit, getting
drawbacks
 is undeniable ,
However
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 I believe the benefits are more than the
drawbacks
. There are many reasons
students
 studying abroad should be encouraged, First of all,
this
 is an especially experience for
students
 to meet different cultural circumstances, which can improve
students
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 international outlook and create new cognition to apply in future.
Moreover
 studying abroad is a long-term investment,
due to
 having a foreign qualification
provides
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 more opportunities to get good pay job. Resulting in higher income and well
quality
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 of life.
On the other hand
,
although
 overseas brings so many benefits, that has disadvantages. First economic problems, studying abroad need to prepare a lot of money to cover tuition, living and eating, despite school can support scholarships, many
students
 struggle to pay to live. Second mental issues, different culture and language problems lack of social connection, rise in loneliness and social isolation, lead to an increase in student depression diagnoses. In conclusion, even though studying abroad still had
drawbacks
,
however
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 in my opinion studying abroad has advantages more than disadvantages. Studying foreign can involve different cultures, that a nice experience for
students
, for long-term investment benefits outweigh the
drawbacks
 to encourage
students
 should study in foreign countries.
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