The diagrams below show the stages in the erosion of a headland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Erosion of a headland

The diagrams below show the stages in the erosion of a headland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Erosion of a headland
The diagrams illustrate how headland
erosion
happens in four steps.
Erosion
starts to destroy the headland from the weakest part of the rock , it starts from a very small area in the place, which is the closest to
water
. In the next stage, the area of destruction becomes quite larger. The destruction is so huge that
water
can move through it . It
also
can be seen , that the next part of an island start to be damaged by
erosion
.
Thirdly
,
water
breaks the upper border , which
connect
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connects
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mainland
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the mainland
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with the piece of land , that was
ate
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eaten
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by
erosion
. At the
last
stage ,it can be seen that there is approximately nothing left from the separated piece of land and
erosion
started to damage other pieces of an island It can be concluded , that
water
slowly but surely devours the mainland using
erosion
.
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