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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the modern world , environmental issues have become a major concern for most countries .some argue extinction of rare species has become a serious environmental crisis nowadays.
Whereas
, others believe that there are other problems that need to be taken
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This
 essay will discuss both notions
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 my opinion. It is obvious that many species are becoming extinct from
this
 world , and the main reason why some individuals
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assume
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 important to notify is because of
loss
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the loss
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 of habitation of
those kind
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 of species, and
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 the
results
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 of deforestation and climate changes in
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 . Eventually, causing problems with the momentum of nature.
For example
, we can see that in Antarctica glaciers are melting down significantly . Thereby, causing issues in the survival of polar bears .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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