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A recent survey shows the number of people traveling through London's underground station boarding Victoria terminal at different times of the day.

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The considering linear chart illustrates the data about the figure of
people
traveling
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 to Victoria terminal at different times of the day by Landon's underground station boarding. The specific figure
recognize
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 in the times
which
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is
directed
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 and reasonable description.
Overall
, it is manifest that
on
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the
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working hours the
extremes
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extreme
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people
 are
use
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used
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 the
traveling
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 but
on the other hand
,
littlest
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people
 are do traveling at
the
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night time. At the start,
the
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100 to 200
people
 have been
like
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 to
travel
on
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 6a.m. to 7.a.m.
Apart from
this
,
the
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most 400 mankind
are
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travel
 through Landon's underground station boarding
on
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from
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 8 to 9 a.m. . Moving forward, the
trend
 has been
fluctuate
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fluctuating
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250
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from 250
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 to 200
people
on
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 10 to 12.
pm
 . Moving ahead, neither
1
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pm nor 2pm
trend
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 are constantly
same
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the same
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 at 200 humanity. As far as direction, it concerned is
trend
 either 2pm to 3
pm
 are remain same approximately 190
people
 have been
traveled
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.
Therefore
, the
trend
 fluctuations arise 4 to 5
pm
 are 180
massis
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masses
mass is
 to 200 mankind
travel
.
As well as
,
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the
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people
travel
 from 6 to 7
pm
 at
agin
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again
 peak point 400
people
 are
traveling
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travelling
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.
Moreover
, the
people
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number of people
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travel
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travelling
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 at night time
for
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from
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 8
pm
 to 10
pm
 have been decrease from 200 mankind to 100 respectively.
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