Some people think government should spend money on sport facilities for training top athlets. Other think it is should be for everybody. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Sport

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competitions and

tournements

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tournaments

became a critical sector in

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modern society. It became a

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industry in the recent decade. Some believe that the

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government

should focus its resources on

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athletes

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others think that everybody should be included in

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budget.

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matter and I will express my opinion on

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issue. There are many reasons that support spending more

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sport

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facilities

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that train the top

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resources spent on elite

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have

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return value.

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have higher chances

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winning international

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sport

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activities.

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yields a greater return for each dollar spent on them. In the form of prizes and medals, and financially in the form of

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sponsorships

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, focusing on

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selected

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will cost the government less

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to build and maintain

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sport

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facilities

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. The

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spared can be spent on other sectors like

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healthcare

or education.

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, spending government

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sport

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for everyone has

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reasons. Experts believe that allocating the budget to build

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facilities

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for everyone can discover more hidden gems. There are a lot of

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athletes

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that can shine if given the required attention and training. On top of that,

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and physical activity is known to reduce cardiovascular diseases in the population. Many

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scientific studies reported that

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can be saved if spent on

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disease

prevention rather than treatment. In conclusion, Many claims that the government should only focus on top

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others disagree with that notion. I personally fully agree with those who believe that the benefits of

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should be enjoyed by the whole population in an equal manner.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

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