in a number of countries,some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railways lines for fast trains between cities.others beleive the money should be spent on improving esisting public transport discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Public transport systems,especially trains, have been widely used in the contemporary epoch ,
as a result
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of how much people are concerned about the environment.
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,trying to reduce using cars.
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why a group of people
believes
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that spending
money
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of
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building improved
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railways
for faster trains is more vital than just improving the
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existing
existent
ones.
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essay will discuss both views.
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with, on one hand , the majority of people,who are concerned with the climatic status of the planet, see that spending an enormous
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of the
country
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finance on new
railways
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is something essential,because how much
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will benefit not only the citizens ,by reaching their
distnation
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destination
faster,but
also
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the businessmen who can invest in
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a project ,
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their employees will attend in
thier
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their
jobs sooner.
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, constructing a new railway,which will be working
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electricity ,probably;will participate not only in using fast trains trying to co-op with the developed countries
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but
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will decrease the
amount
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of
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feul
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fuel
used to operate only one train,which will affect positively on the environment.
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, some believe spending
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gigantic
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of
money
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this
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modefications
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modification
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is definitely a waste of
money
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.To illustrate , to proceed
on
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new
railways
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,the
amount
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of
money
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spent on infrastructure is going to be huge .
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, it is going to cause a pause in the transport system to be accomplished.
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spending
money
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on developing the
currunt
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current
railways
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is the
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solution.
to conclude
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, in my
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personal
opinion ,spending the government’s
money
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on the existing
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railways
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advantages outweighs the disadvantages of building new ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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