The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides information about how the direction of Anthropology undergraduate students did after finishing a particular university and the table illustrates the income after 5 years working with these students, including 3 different employments.
Overall
,
it is clear that
full-time work is the largest distributor of Anthropology undergraduate direction,
while
the highest salary of employment is government sector. In terms of Anthropology undergraduate direction, the proportion of full-time work is the largest number at 52%.
In contrast
, the percentage of part-time work and postgrad study is the least
rate
which is 5%. Whist, there had a similar percentage is 8% in the number of people who do full-time postgrad study and
also
, a piece of unknown information. Turning to the Anthopologogy graduated students' income, the government sector is able to gain money at the highest
rate
with 50% (100,000+ dollars).
However
, the freelance consultants and government sector are the smallest
rate
of salaries and they
also
had the same
rate
which is 5% (25,000-49,000 dollars),
similarly
, there saw the same income in terms of 50,000-74,999 dollars with 15%.
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