It is easier for wealthy people to maintain good health than it is for people who do not have large amounts of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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IN CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY IS WIDELY

BELIEVE

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THAT THE

HEALTH

SHOULD BE

MANTAINED

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MAINTAINED

BY INDIVIDUALS

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SINCE IT PLAYS

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AN EXTREMELLY

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EXTREMELLY

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EXTREMELY

ROLE FOR THE HUMAN BEING. IN

THIS

STATEMENT, I WILL SHOW THE REASONS WHY I

DEFENITELY

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DEFINITELY

BELIEVE THAT IT IS HARDER FOR POOR

PEOPLE

TO KEEP

ITS

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HEALTH

IN A GOOD CONDITION IN

COMPARISSON

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COMPARISON

FOR

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THOSE WHO ARE WEALTHY. ON ONE HAND, WEALTHIER

PEOPLE

CAN PAY FOR DIFFERENT TYPES OF

HEALTH

INSURANCE IN COMPANIES THAT WILL PROVIDE THEM

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BETTER

HEALTH

SUPPORT, HAVING SEVERAL SERVICES BEING COVERED BY THESE COMPANIES. FOR

ISTANCE

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INSTANCE

, IF THE PEARSON NEEDS TO PASS THROUGH A SURGERY, IT CAN EASILY BE COVERED BY THEM, FREELING THE INDIVIDUAL

FOR

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EXPENSIVE

PROCEDURE'S

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COSTS.

ADDITIONALLY

PEOPLE

CAN ENROLL THEMSELVES IN GREAT GYMS, WITH UPDATED MACHINES AND

INCREDIBLES PERSONNAL

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INCREDIBLE PERSONAL

TRAINNERS

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TRAINERS

, WHICH WILL ALLOW THEM TO

MANTAIN

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ITS

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PHYSICAL ACTIVITY, USING BETTER DEVICES AND SKILLED

PROFESSIONAL

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PROFESSIONALS

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ON THE OTHER HAND

PEOPLE

WHO DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH MONEY TO PAY FOR A GOOD INSURANCE

HEALTH

COMPANY

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WILL PROBABLY HAVE DIFFICULT ACCESS WHEN IT COMES TO

HEALTH

PROCEDURES.

FOR EXAMPLE

, IF THE INDIVIDUAL IS AFFECTED BY A DISEASE, IT WILL HAVE

DIFFICULT

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TO PAY

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FOR SOME MEDICINES, WHICH WILL COMPROMISE

ITS

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REABILITATION

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REHABILITATION

PROCESS.

MOREOVER

, THEY WILL STRUGGLE

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MANTAIN

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MAINTAIN

HEALTH

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HEALTHY

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DIET SINCE

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PROBABLY WILL NOT BE ABLE TO PAY FOR

THIS

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THESE

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PRODUCTS, ONCE IT IS EXPENSIVE TO

MANTAIN

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MAINTAIN

, DEPENDING ON THE TYPE.

TO SUM UP

, I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT FOR PORR

PEOPLE

IS HARDER TO

MANTAIN

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MAINTAIN

SUCH

A GOOD

HEALTH

WHILE

THERE MAY BE OPPOSING VIEWS ON

THIS

MATTER, I AM CONVINCED THAT THOSE IMPORTANT THINGS MENTIONED ABOVE ARE EXPENSIVE TO

MANTAIN

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MAINTAIN

, BEING ALMOST

IMPOSSIBL

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IMPOSSIBLE

FOR THOSE WHO DO NOT HAVE LARGE AMOUNTS OF MONEY.

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282 words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Topic Vocabulary:

Access to quality healthcare
Expedited treatment options
Cutting-edge medical technologies
Healthy diet and lifestyle
Organic and whole foods
Environmental factors
Cleaner neighborhoods
Financial stability
Health education
Preventative healthcare measures
Social determinants of health
Recreational facilities
Stress and mental health
Living conditions

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