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The increasing use of computers and mobile phones has had a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, computers and mobile phones are used by many
people
. It means young
people
 have more opportunities to
study
 online
by
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 modern technologies and improve their reading and writing skills. I slightly disagree with the statement that computers and mobile phones have had a negative effect on young
people
. Some
people
 believe that increasing
use
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 of modern technology will make their children
have
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 health and mental problems. But most of them use computers and phones in the wrong way. There are many theories and
study
 documents for young
people
 to learn. They can easily
study
 on the online website
by
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 one click.
People
 can check their
skill
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skills
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 by using websites with online exams. Some
people
 can
study
in
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 a long time with the help of technology and
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 successful. The next reason for my opinion is that you can call and meet many
people
 all over the world by using a phone and computer. You can improve your listening and speaking
skill
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 when talking with them.
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