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Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the number of individuals who own
businees
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business
businesses
 significantly
rised
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raised
risen
rise
.
Somebodys'
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 believe that
this
 thing
more
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is more
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 profitable than working for other
businessmans
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businessman
businessmen
 or government
structure
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structures
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.
This
 essay will examine
merits
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the merits
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 and drawbacks of
this
 decision and give arguments for supporting each view. The main advantage
to
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of
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 making business is independence.
Persons'
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A persons'
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 salary
depend
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depends
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 directly only
by
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on
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him
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their
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 labour.
Furthermore
,
this
 activity would
opened
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a
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plenty of capabilities for
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the owner
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owner
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owners
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such
 as freedom of speech,
indepent
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independent
 daily routine and communication
to
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with
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 others.
Therefore
, the crowd believe that
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those who
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who
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those
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working
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work
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 for their own business
live
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more
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apply
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easier than
the
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apply
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individual who
working
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work
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 in
organization
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the organization
an organization
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.
For instance
, in the USA,
local
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the local
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 population have had at least one
buisness
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business
 during their life because they want to have
freedom
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the freedom
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 for working
as well as
the
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a
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 passive source of money.
Nevertheless
, people should understand that having
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a buisness
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buisness
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business
mean
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means
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to be
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being
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 ready
to
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for
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 difficult barriers in
way
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the way
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. The cost of the products
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depends
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depend
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ondepend
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 the economy of
state
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the state
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,
thus
,
buisnessmans
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businessman
businessmen
 must analyse the rating on inflation.
In addition
, the owning company must require much time
for
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to develop.
This
 can be
issue
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an issue
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to
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with
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 the other things in
humans'
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humans
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 life
such
 as family, friends, and
hobby
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hobbies
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.
Thus
,
the
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apply
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most of the
buisnessmans
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businessman
businessmen
 had problems in
social
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their social
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 life and they usually are lonely.
For example
, the richest man in
the
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apply
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history Elon Musk spent at least twenty hours in
day
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the day
a day
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for
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apply
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managing Tesla and SpaceX,
although
, he have been one of the
famoust
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famous
person
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people
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in
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on
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 Twitter, he said that he had problems with mental health, especially in brain core which is worked to communicate. By the way of conclusion,
the
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apply
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people should have
been
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recognized all pros and cons of owning
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a buisness
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buisness
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business
 before
to decide
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deciding
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. All occupations had advantages and disadvantages,
therefore
person
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a person
the person
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 should choose clearly before
to become
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becoming
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a
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an
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 expert in one sphere.
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