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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the three types of convenience
food
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 consumed by teenagers in Mauritius between 1985 and 2015. These three varieties of
food
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 were
burgers
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,
pizza
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, and fried
chicken
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.
Overall
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, there was a significant increase in the consumption of
burgers
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 and
pizza
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 over the reporting period,
while
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 the number of Mauritius adolescents consuming
pizza
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 declined dramatically. Looking at the details,
burgers
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 (10
times
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) and fried
chicken
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 (5
times
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) were the second
last
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 and least favourite convenience
food
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 consumed by teens in 1985.
However
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, both the consumption of
burgers
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 and fried
chicken
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 surged constantly. By 2005, Mauritius adolescents were reported to have eaten fried
chicken
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 60
times
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 annually, where the time of consuming
burgers
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 was just 10
times
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 lesser than those who had
burgers
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. Both figures continued to grow, with
burgers
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 (70
times
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 per year) being the most favourable convenience
food
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 and fried
chicken
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 (62
times
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 per year) being the second
last
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 favourable fast
food
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 in 2015.
Conversely
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, even though
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pizza
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the pizza
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 was consumed the most by adolescents in 1985, accounting for 60
times
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 annually, it underwent a downward trajectory throughout the entire period. By 2015, youngsters only consumed
pizza
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 10
times
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 per annum.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, burgers, pizza, chicken, times with synonyms.
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