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the plan shows the change of a small theater in 2000 and 2012

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 how much a particular
theater
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theatre
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 has changed between 2010 and 2012. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,It seems that the
theater
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 was expanded sideways to incorporate more facilities, a number of changes took place all over the layout of the building, with some existing features being converted and relocated in the process. The only exception was the central part, which remained relatively unchanged. With regard to the south of the
theater
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,
which
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where
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 a cafe could be spotted in the right corner,
while
 the auditorium and main entrance remained the same,the ticket office was moved to the west, replacing the former cafe.To the west, the administration office was moved to the back.
This
 was to make way for a new restaurant area in the left rear corner. As for the north
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the
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building, the auditorium in the middle was no change, even though the stage in
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front
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 of the
theater
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 was
also
 expanded, with the addition of a side hall behind it.To the left and to the right were the media and storage, respectively,
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new shower area was built next
the
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 media.
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