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The idea of going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home beause of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in different culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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There is no denying that enrolling in
foreign
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a foreign
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university
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universities
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 is essential in
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the shaping
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of
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people
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's future.
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, many
people
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 claim that it is
stressfull
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stressful
 for youths to live in another
country
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 far away from
homeland
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their homeland
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 and their relatives. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement and
i
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 will explore my point of view in the forthcoming
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. On the one hand, many parents of
students
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 worry about child because
of
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they leave
mother
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their mother
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country
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.
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, for
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students
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 it is tough one too to live and study in another
country
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surrounding
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 by unfamiliar
people
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with
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of
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 other
nationality
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nationalities
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. Often
students
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 may miss their parents and folks, which makes them sad and frustrated.
Obviously
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 for some
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people
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 it is significantly hard to live among another culture and mentality.
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, studying
in
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at
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university
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a university
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 abroad provides
people
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tremendous
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opportunity
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opportunities
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. Foreign education is
important
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an important
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 aspect
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of in
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in
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 individual's life and
it is clear that
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 your incomes depend on
level
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the level
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 of education.
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 in my
country
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 if someone has overseas education he can claim
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high
paing
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paid
 job,
nad
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and
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 has more employment opportunities.
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Furthermore
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people
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 by living in other
country
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amids
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amidst
amides
amid
 other culture broaden their minds and horizons. By interacting with
people
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students
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develope
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develop
 their language and social skills. In conclusion, undoubtedly there are
number
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 of reasons that going abroad is beneficial for
students
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 rather
studying
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than studying
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 at home, owing to
this
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 I completely opine that
student
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students
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 should not afraid to go
in
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to
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 foreign universities because they can obtain priceless
knowledges
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knowledge
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 and skills which they can acquire in their own
country
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.
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