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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates how much money an average family in a UK city earned and paid for
food
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 and
clothes
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,
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 the pie charts compare the proportion of those categories in the
years
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 2010 and 2013. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
although
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 the total income of a British family decreased between 2010 and 2013, the amount of money spent on foodstuff and clothing saw an opposite trend. It can
also
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 be seen that British people have more consumption of
food
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 than
clothes
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 category in both
years
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. A deep analysis of the table provided reveals that in the year 2010, an average family earned 29000 dollars, which was more than twofold than spending on
food
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.
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, three
years
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 later, there was a gradual dip in terms of a British household's earnings, from 29000 to 25000 dollars.
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, the expenditure on
food
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 and
clothes
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 saw a slight growth with the figure reaching 15000 dollars during the given period. Regarding the pie charts, the percentage of spending on meat and fish was the highest of all categories in 2010 but witnessed a drop in 2013, from 29% to 23% respectively. It is
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 notable that the second most popular category in 2010 went into fruit and vegetables with 26%, climbing to the 1st rank in the next three
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 and reaching its peak at 30%. Dairy products
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 experienced an upward trend with the figure growing by 4% over a period of 3
years
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.
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, between 2010 and 2013, there was a fall in the proportion of
clothes
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 spending, at 15% and 13% respectively.
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, the percentage of other
food
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 in a UK family remained steady during the period, at exactly 18%.
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